The boy lean't to his left and swooped around another corner. He never felt more alive than when he was on his magic carpet.
Finding a straight stretch of road he urged the carpet to top speed, sending plumes of dust from the ground all around him. He quickly approached a woman dressed in black carrying a bowl of fruit.
The dusty golden bowl contained red juicy apples, green luxurious pears, brightly coloured oranges, and bananas as yellow as the sun. He swooped in and quickly grabbed a red juicy apple, racing away so he wouldn’t get into any trouble.
He could only hear the stones rattling on the ground. When he looked back he could only see plumes and plumes of dust in the air. He went up high in the sky and spied the lady swiping the plumes of dust away from her face.
“GET BACK HERE YOU SCUMBAG!!!!” She yelled angrily.
When the clouds of dust vanished she could see only a silent town.
Room 1 has been doing pobble 365 (magic carpet) all week.
What I found exciting.
Was putting in all the descriptive words in my writing.
What I found challenging.
Was spelling the descriptive words.
What I might do next time.
Is grab a dictionary and add even more descriptive words.
Great reflecting on your work, Te Kawana. I can see it has really got you thinking about what to do next time.
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